if only I knew
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(04-27-2013, 10:42 AM)casey Wrote:  Was searching hard, Who?
for something ,didnt exist Comma in the wrong place. Didn't with an apostrophe. Who/What didn't exist?
for a thing without a clue
If only I knew

all the trust I put
it wasnt even true wasn't
Walked the road
which lead to nothing new
If only I knew

No tree, no leaves
Dead end is all I could feel
Maybe destiny is trying to show u I think it would work better with "you". But I think that's a matter of opinion
If only, u knew
Just some small thoughts.
I think the idea is nice, it just needs a little more editing, and some periods wouldn't hurt either. Thanks for the read Smile
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Messages In This Thread
if only I knew - by casey - 04-27-2013, 10:42 AM
RE: if only I knew - by AlexSharp - 04-27-2013, 10:48 AM
RE: if only I knew - by Magpie - 04-27-2013, 11:21 AM
RE: if only I knew - by casey - 04-27-2013, 08:21 PM
RE: if only I knew - by Magpie - 04-27-2013, 08:54 PM
RE: if only I knew - by Volaticus - 04-28-2013, 12:20 AM
RE: if only I knew - by casey - 04-28-2013, 02:36 AM



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