Brain Wash

[tectak]

I know what hierarchical means and if you look for the meaning in the poem it makes sense. Perhaps specifically it's not the best word, but the definition works. Also, in poetry you don't have to have correct punctuation everywhere.

And I figured by at least naming the poem what I did you'd be able to make out what it means. Mind control of the masses, putting people in submission to a ruler's power...

I know the incorrect punctuation everywhere is annoying and I'll fix that, but I just thought that I had some creative liscence to do what I did.

No eli, you do not have to have correct punctuation everywhere, but you do need it somewhere. You do not display enough competency to convince this reader that you are writing with licence ( let alone "liscence". See what I mean?) rather than ignorance. By your own words you are damned. If a word is "specifically not the best word" then you imply you took some time and care to ensure that you used a word that was unsuitable. Serious crit expects you to take time and care to ensure that the word used is "specifically the best word".
Please do not look upon this crit as destructive. The usual enjoinder is to say that you are probably a very nice chap and that this crit is of the poetry. You may, if course, be a nasty piece of work....but the crit would be the same. Take some comfort in that. By the way, titles DO help to inform the reader...but that task should be better performed by the poem.
Best,
tectak