04-26-2013, 10:27 AM
(04-25-2013, 04:19 PM)newsclippings Wrote: I have this underlying need to change "come" to "came" in this poem.I agree, I like "came" more than "come". Also, perhaps consider breaking up "During, not after" to "During/ not after" and shortening "(as I catch tigers)" to "(catching tigers)". I feel that this works better with the meter.
It is brief. Makes me wonder what you were choosing between.