Playing with Connotation - Depression

[tectak]

It’s dark, there’s no place to go.Weak..then cliche
No place to turn, no place to hide.cliche then cliche
My head is screaming, can’t escape.cliche then cliche
My emotions numb, can’t feel a thing.cliche then cliche
The pain inside, won’t erase.cliche then incomplete syntax
My body limp, won’t progress.cliche then uncertain syntax
My thoughts are poison, to myself. this line is keepable if you correct the grammatical inexactitude
The hole is deep, too profound.cliche. Not profound
I’ve hit the point, of my despair.cliche then flaky grammar
Inside I cry, of my own tribulation.

cliche then nonsense

Hi and welcome to serious crit,
Consider reposting in mild. There us not much salvageable from this shipwreck. The cargo was ten tons of assorted cliche and nobody wants it. Leave it on the beach and start again.
Find something that you are familiar with and write it in a fresh way. If you are unaware of your cliches then read more before you write. You began with a disadvantage in that this sort of angst-ridden stuff blows like the rubbish it is on every site you care to visit....some sites rely on its regularity of posting to exist. Not this site.
Good for you for posting but this is serious crit. To close; your effort is list-like, terse, imageless, lacking in rhythm and old-hat.
On the plus side,
Best,
tectak