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[Black rubber slips]
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04-24-2013, 09:39 PM
(04-24-2013, 09:30 PM)rowens Wrote: The lines sound stiff and read like a stacked pile. Maybe you wanted something like that?I tried to make it sound as tense as possible, not really smooth, and a slightly panicked tone. Does that come through well? I didn't want it to be the smoothest and calmest poem possible. |
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[Black rubber slips] - by Buck - 04-24-2013, 11:10 AM
RE: [Black rubber slips] - by billy - 04-24-2013, 11:34 AM
RE: [Black rubber slips] - by rowens - 04-24-2013, 09:30 PM
RE: [Black rubber slips] - by Buck - 04-24-2013, 09:39 PM
RE: [Black rubber slips] - by rowens - 04-24-2013, 09:48 PM
RE: [Black rubber slips] - by Buck - 04-24-2013, 09:51 PM
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