The Cherries of D.C.
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(04-24-2013, 07:56 AM)Heslopian Wrote:  I like the title, personally; it adds uniqueness, realism and even dialect in its abbreviation of cherry blossom trees to cherries (though that did initially cause me confusion, before I read the note explaining that you mean trees and not cherries the foodstuff). The poem itself is a compact and effective conveyance of a natural wonder, reminding me of similar works by Philip Larkin - like "The Trees": http://www.poemhunter.com/best-poems/phi...the-trees/ - and Emily Dickinson. My one suggestion would be that you replace "one" with "a moment", as "one" implies that this is the only time the trees will blossom/ All critique is JMHO, of course. Thanks for the readSmile
Heslopian, I actually picked "one" specifically because the trees only bloom once a year, and the blooms last for less than a week. That's why I figured "one moment" would work better than "a moment" because of the singular nature of the event itself annually.
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The Cherries of D.C. - by Buck - 04-24-2013, 05:26 AM
RE: The Cherries of D.C. - by shemthepenman - 04-24-2013, 05:54 AM
RE: The Cherries of D.C. - by Buck - 04-24-2013, 06:26 AM
RE: The Cherries of D.C. - by shemthepenman - 04-24-2013, 06:58 AM
RE: The Cherries of D.C. - by Buck - 04-24-2013, 07:05 AM
RE: The Cherries of D.C. - by heslopian - 04-24-2013, 07:56 AM
RE: The Cherries of D.C. - by Buck - 04-24-2013, 10:50 AM
RE: The Cherries of D.C. - by Heartafire - 04-25-2013, 06:52 AM
RE: The Cherries of D.C. - by Buck - 04-25-2013, 10:09 AM
RE: The Cherries of D.C. - by Volaticus - 04-26-2013, 08:01 AM



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