04-24-2013, 05:54 AM
Hello, the title seems ok.
The first two lines are great. but the rest is a bit empty and cliche. Also, anthropomorphism just seems a bit lazy. If you want to persist with this one, I would suggest three word changes: anxiously, anticipating and clima... oh, I read climactic
I swear I am going fucking word blind.
The first two lines are great. but the rest is a bit empty and cliche. Also, anthropomorphism just seems a bit lazy. If you want to persist with this one, I would suggest three word changes: anxiously, anticipating and clima... oh, I read climactic
I swear I am going fucking word blind.