04-23-2013, 05:50 PM
(04-23-2013, 09:41 AM)allykat727 Wrote: Aw such a sad pieceThanks for the suggestion, it definitely fits nicely. The word "having" did stick out to me but I was unable to find a suitable replacement.I could really feel your emptiness. I would suggest "A balloon soars past that escaped from the boy" because that extra syllable with 'having' seemed to interrupt the flow. Good job
Thanks for taking the time to read

I could really feel your emptiness. I would suggest "A balloon soars past