Literay Legacy

[milo]

I would go to the library
when I was small
and inhale the pungency of literacy.
Small lungs
Devouring
Big words, ideas, legacies.
My sack full,
My mother led my hand
Towards the elevator
Down to the first floor
Where a round pink woman
With round pink glasses
Would wait smiling at me.
Anticipation
Rose with every swipe.
Stories,
Fantasies,
Dream escapes
All for me in my bag.
I’ll bring them back in a month
Or two.

You know there is a great smell of slightly mouldering pages and ink that mixes with the aroma of cofee and makes me think of hours spent reading in the library. It's too bad "literacy" doesn't have a smell or I might be able to connect with the idea of inhaling it IYKWIM.

Phrases like "I would go to" are weak and passive forms of "I went"

The bad grammar and random capitilisation are not working.

The line breaks here are . . . terrible, as haphazard as possible. Throwing a dart at a page might produce a better effect, or it might not.

You have a great idea here - a trip to the library and the whimsy that goes with it, you need to focus more on the details to bring it to life (round lady with round pink glasses)

good luck and thanks for sharing.

milo