Can I Be This Leaf Which Falls To Me?

[tectak]

Can I be this leaf which falls to me?rhetorical questions should be answerable but no answer is given. There are exceptions. The answer here is ...no. It is a rather silly question. Not sure what you are wanting to say.
It flutters rather violently, that I can see.Too wordy to no effect. "rather violently" is so short of carbs that I am hungry for a big, fat metaphor.
But that is not all, for I hear it too,I am tempted to say, "Who cares?". Grammar suspect. Comma after "too" required.
Softer than anything I once knew.Extruded rhyme. Forced.
So may I embrace it; this fragile thing?
I always wonder what it shall bring.A glaring disconnect between the lines in this couplet. So may I embrace it? I wonder if it is the postman.. There is only another forced rhyme to warrant this very weak and pointless couplet.

But am I this leaf, still falling to me?I have told you once and I wish you would stop asking. No. You are NOT a leaf. Go see a shrink
It seems so perfect that it cannot be. So is a diamond yet it is. Too wordy but not saying ANYTHING
I know if I tried, copy it I cannot do,Yoda speak is always the final resort of the failing muse. On with this I cannot go.
But it looks my way and asks, “Who are you?”Oh yes. Get help. Get help soon.
“Why, certainly not an angel who may sing.”
But there behind me, I see grow a lonely wing.Ghastly end but I am grateful for it. I look forward to your first flight. Should be interesting.

Hello,
Good to see you posting but not a pleasure to read. I don't think you had any idea where this was going...and if you say you did then that is worse. Far too wordy in a vacuos way. Not thought through, forced rhymes every time, hopelessly faux-poetic ( sorry milo, but if it fits , wear it), mostly gobbledygook.
So. Where from here?
Well, begin with the premise that rhyming is a discipline of the wordsmith rather than the poet. You do not need to rhyme. If you can encapsulate your thoughts into a few well selected words you will make a poem. Use imagery, metaphor and structure to bring your piece alive. Read more good poetry to get the hang of it. DO NOT GIVE UP!
Best,
tectak