Balcony Scene
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the words are excellent. the image of a young girl leaning over the balcony was picture perfect. for me the extra long line length took a little from the whole enjoyment of the read. (but not too much ) i wonder if BOY WHO IS NOT A BOY would be less of shout but just as visible if it were italicised in lower case

good solid read

welcome to the site.
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Balcony Scene - by MissAddy - 04-21-2013, 07:05 AM
RE: Balcony Scene - by Leanne - 04-21-2013, 07:13 AM
RE: Balcony Scene - by shemthepenman - 04-21-2013, 07:21 AM
RE: Balcony Scene - by MissAddy - 04-21-2013, 07:27 AM
RE: Balcony Scene - by Leanne - 04-21-2013, 07:28 AM
RE: Balcony Scene - by billy - 04-21-2013, 09:17 AM



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