Balcony Scene

[Leanne]

It's rare that I see a piece written in this manner that I instantly like. This is that piece. You have matched subject and style very well. The only line I would suggest changing at this point is "The space between us contains fifteen years" -- this is a little bit awkward. Perhaps simply "Fifteen years of space between us".

Otherwise, this is some very good writing. The Romeo and Juliet allusion is well handled, not overdone. Nice work!