Blinded by my desire

[halcro]

Hi,
It's a very short poem, with not a lot going on, besides.. talking. In my opinion, anyway. I could see it benefit greatly with some vivid images I see the base of a poem, but it needs some meat on those bones/sentences. There's also some grammatical errors, as already mentioned.
Thanks for the read

Everything is where it is meant to be so do not consider changes to what i have previously said. I like your idea of imagery however, it is meant to be a short poem so i do not want to add any more to it and no bother about the read, plenty more where that came from!

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No, it isn't interesting at all. The poem is vague, repetitive, and doesn't say much. If you approached the content with the idea of adding imagery you might be able to make it interesting.

Someone needs to think before they type then! Haha "It also needs imagery to be interesting."