Blinded by my desire

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I was blinded by my desire for too long.
Loving and caring,
She was,
Always helping me to succeed.
Yet,
She stood before me,
Blinded by her presence,
I did not see.

Everything here is meant to be so do not comment on structure, grammar or punctuation.

Okay, if we lay all those areas aside. It also needs imagery to be interesting.
"it also needs imagery" So it is already interesting but needs more imagery to make it even more interesting.

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I was blinded by my desire for too long.
Loving and caring,
She was,
Always helping me to succeed.
Yet,
She stood before me,
Blinded by her presence,
I did not see.

Everything here is meant to be so do not comment on structure, grammar or punctuation.

Okay, if we lay all those areas aside. It also needs imagery to be interesting.
"it also needs imagery" So it is already interesting but needs more imagery to make it even more interesting.