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Blinded by my desire

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04-17-2013, 08:00 PM

(04-17-2013, 04:14 PM)halcro Wrote:
(04-17-2013, 06:27 AM)halcro Wrote: I was blinded by my desire for too long.
Loving and caring,
She was,
Always helping me to succeed.
Yet,
She stood before me,
Blinded by her presence,
I did not see.

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Blinded by my desire - by halcro - 04-17-2013, 06:27 AM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by tectak - 04-17-2013, 06:36 AM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by Volaticus - 04-17-2013, 08:07 AM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by halcro - 04-18-2013, 02:57 AM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by halcro - 04-17-2013, 04:14 PM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by Todd - 04-17-2013, 08:00 PM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by milo - 04-17-2013, 08:27 PM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by halcro - 04-17-2013, 09:01 PM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by Leanne - 04-17-2013, 04:25 PM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by tectak - 04-17-2013, 06:54 PM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by milo - 04-17-2013, 06:55 PM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by Todd - 04-17-2013, 08:31 PM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by milo - 04-17-2013, 08:34 PM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by Todd - 04-17-2013, 08:36 PM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by milo - 04-17-2013, 08:38 PM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by Todd - 04-17-2013, 11:03 PM

RE: Blinded by my desire - by rowens - 04-17-2013, 11:15 PM

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