04-17-2013, 08:07 AM
Hi,
It's a very short poem, with not a lot going on, besides.. talking. In my opinion, anyway. I could see it benefit greatly with some vivid images
I see the base of a poem, but it needs some meat on those bones/sentences. There's also some grammatical errors, as already mentioned.
Thanks for the read
It's a very short poem, with not a lot going on, besides.. talking. In my opinion, anyway. I could see it benefit greatly with some vivid images
I see the base of a poem, but it needs some meat on those bones/sentences. There's also some grammatical errors, as already mentioned.Thanks for the read