Love for a High School Motivational Speaker

[Ganman]

I'd suggest dropping the harsh rhyme scheme and sticking with something more like the final stanza, with more internal rhyme. I think you'd benefit a lot from not having those constraints.

Also, you want a better clincher than "I love you, sainted lady." From the moment I read that, my thoughts were, "Oh, another love poem." You have some really cool imagery here, and I think the first line cheapens that, in some respects.