04-14-2013, 04:34 AM
Thank you, tectak and shemthepenman, for your kind, in-depth and thoughtful critiques
I'd forgotten that you're a Yorkshireman, tec! I think you told me you are in a PM once.
shem, repetition is something I'm almost OCD about. I torture myself making sure I don't repeat words. But it's an irrational compulsion, I'm aware, and I like your suggestion about repeating "through".
I'd forgotten that you're a Yorkshireman, tec! I think you told me you are in a PM once.shem, repetition is something I'm almost OCD about. I torture myself making sure I don't repeat words. But it's an irrational compulsion, I'm aware, and I like your suggestion about repeating "through".
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe