04-14-2013, 04:18 AM
I was drawn in by the title.
Thank you for posting; I enjoyed the poem.
When I read it, I guessed the lady was someone religious, such as a pastor, who had a crisis in faith (the candle) caused at least in part by some frauds, so she quit the ministry (and stopped collecting pay from the church), to either become literally a motivational speaker or to become a high school teacher. --this is what I guessed before reading some of the critiques.
Other thoughts:
soot filled sky is unclear (and should be "soot-filled" I think). Is it a metaphor for dark clouds? Or really filled with soot--and if so, why notable? Related to the candle?
I think after "Galilee" should be a comma, not period.
I am not bothered by the variations in meter and rhyme.
I had fun trying to piece together this puzzle. But ultimately, when I am done, I am wondering if it may not be that some of the important puzzle pieces are missing.
Thank you for posting; I enjoyed the poem.
When I read it, I guessed the lady was someone religious, such as a pastor, who had a crisis in faith (the candle) caused at least in part by some frauds, so she quit the ministry (and stopped collecting pay from the church), to either become literally a motivational speaker or to become a high school teacher. --this is what I guessed before reading some of the critiques.
Other thoughts:
soot filled sky is unclear (and should be "soot-filled" I think). Is it a metaphor for dark clouds? Or really filled with soot--and if so, why notable? Related to the candle?
I think after "Galilee" should be a comma, not period.
I am not bothered by the variations in meter and rhyme.
I had fun trying to piece together this puzzle. But ultimately, when I am done, I am wondering if it may not be that some of the important puzzle pieces are missing.