04-13-2013, 08:45 PM
Thanks for your critique tectak! It's massively helpful to me, and later I'll put it together with the suggestions from UnicornRainbowCake and see how I can improve the piece 
That said, the lack of decent punctuation is something I will simply admit to - I don't really know how to use it! I am trying to learn, but it is taking me a while. I think it's just a lack of practice, really - I was taught it ten years ago in highschool but no-one seems to have much cared since then LOL. So, seriously, thank you for your information! I will endeavor to do better 
That said, the lack of decent punctuation is something I will simply admit to - I don't really know how to use it! I am trying to learn, but it is taking me a while. I think it's just a lack of practice, really - I was taught it ten years ago in highschool but no-one seems to have much cared since then LOL. So, seriously, thank you for your information! I will endeavor to do better