04-13-2013, 04:44 PM
Okay, well, first things first - It's gorgeous. The rhythm, the gentle but nonrestrictive, uncommitted rhymes, it's flowing and fabulous in style.
However, personally, I'm struggling to find the meaning. I will admit freely that this is just as likely my ignorance as it is your poem, but I would wait to hear from a few other people, see if they feel the same way. You may like to expand it a little to give it more context.
However, personally, I'm struggling to find the meaning. I will admit freely that this is just as likely my ignorance as it is your poem, but I would wait to hear from a few other people, see if they feel the same way. You may like to expand it a little to give it more context.