04-12-2013, 10:10 PM
Thankyou again for critique - you've confirmed my fears. Perhaps this is a tale better written in prose rather than poetry (as the original was). It seems I've taken a step backwards with my edit.
Do you think it is worth the salvaging as it is, or am I flogging a dead horse? I understand where I've gone wrong, but I'm not sure what is in it worth saving - if any.
Would it work better if I was to cut a lot of the complicated story and focus more on the drink driving? I don't want it to be comedically depressed and sombre, or OTT.
Thanks
Do you think it is worth the salvaging as it is, or am I flogging a dead horse? I understand where I've gone wrong, but I'm not sure what is in it worth saving - if any.
Would it work better if I was to cut a lot of the complicated story and focus more on the drink driving? I don't want it to be comedically depressed and sombre, or OTT.
Thanks
- Amy
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)