04-11-2013, 07:31 AM
I actually really enjoyed reading this. Your meter and rhyme is executed and most importantly naturally.
I'm not quite sure exactly what happens in it though - call me an idiot, but I'm not sure who she is. I understand that you love her and still love her, but past that, I think some parts are too abstract and stray away from explaining what is going on.
I'm not quite sure exactly what happens in it though - call me an idiot, but I'm not sure who she is. I understand that you love her and still love her, but past that, I think some parts are too abstract and stray away from explaining what is going on.
- Amy
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)