04-10-2013, 08:28 AM
to quote from milo's comment: "Also, the writing is a high enough caliber that I want some closure, some explication."
I am sure. milo has looked deeper into this than I, so he will have good reasons for his opinion here.
So, I am not disagreeing with his statement, when writing:
I, that is just me, like the unusual structure of this poem, because simultaneously with the thinning out of words the intensity of the poet's desire seems to thicken: to grow. To me this sounds very authentic.
But as I said: just a very personal take.
Still I can also see milo's point, Tom.
Really glad (if a bit envious, I must confess ;-)), that its your poem.
serge
(,wondering if Deleuze was a closet mycologist ,-) )
I am sure. milo has looked deeper into this than I, so he will have good reasons for his opinion here.
So, I am not disagreeing with his statement, when writing:
I, that is just me, like the unusual structure of this poem, because simultaneously with the thinning out of words the intensity of the poet's desire seems to thicken: to grow. To me this sounds very authentic.
But as I said: just a very personal take.
Still I can also see milo's point, Tom.
Really glad (if a bit envious, I must confess ;-)), that its your poem.
serge
(,wondering if Deleuze was a closet mycologist ,-) )