04-09-2013, 08:04 AM
as others have said, there are seeds in your poem for a better poem. i'd suggest cutting most of it away
Youth's lost potential
lost will.
is one way to go. but i also think such statements need fleshing out in a follow stanza. pose the question show us why it's asked, show us how to deal with it or why it can't be dealt with.
do think like a sandibrook shooting play a part of the reason, or child labour, is it politically based.
Youth's lost potential
lost will.
is one way to go. but i also think such statements need fleshing out in a follow stanza. pose the question show us why it's asked, show us how to deal with it or why it can't be dealt with.
do think like a sandibrook shooting play a part of the reason, or child labour, is it politically based.