Aubade

[Heartafire]

Hello Heart and cloudy, thank you both for your critiques and generous comments. Both of you being in accord with your thoughts I'll be lazy and just reply once! The sequence and wording of the last two lines gave me a bit of grief, I was after something succinct and all inclusive with a hard finality, had actually considered heralding, and thought it too soft, I'm not so sure now that you both indicated that is the way to go. Would appreciate your thoughts, cheers!

Hi Popeye, though the use of "cuckoo" is not lost on me, I find this not a damning poem, but a comment on life. I think I would have chosen "songbirds herald adultery" as the final line. Once again, let me say I like this short piece very much.
Heart