04-08-2013, 05:20 PM
I'm with everyone else on elaborating your 'missing' ideas.
I like the idea that you're using in this, but I think a lot of your stanzas currently don't add to your idea much. Currently, past your first two stanzas,nothing much is added that you couldn't figure out for yourself.
So when doing your edit, don't lengthen it, but replace some of your current stanzas with explaining what the 'missing' is.
I like the idea that you're using in this, but I think a lot of your stanzas currently don't add to your idea much. Currently, past your first two stanzas,nothing much is added that you couldn't figure out for yourself.
So when doing your edit, don't lengthen it, but replace some of your current stanzas with explaining what the 'missing' is.
- Amy
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)
(You wouldn't be surprised to know my parents did not christen me UnicornRainbowCake.)