I liked this poem a lot, it was really wordy and yet you managed to make it flow off the page pretty nicely. I agree that it might be better to trim a little of the fatso to speak, but also think the vocabulary added intensity to the poem.
A cool poem to read aloud, good work. I have never read any Lorca (or even heard of him), but I'll do a bit of wikipeding and maybe do some reading.
A cool poem to read aloud, good work. I have never read any Lorca (or even heard of him), but I'll do a bit of wikipeding and maybe do some reading.