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[milo]

to milo, billy et all-- sometimes I stray too far over to the prose side. did I do that here? thoughts appreciated. thanks. =]

For the most part, I don't find this too prosey at all, I like the voice, I like the specifics. There is a grammar error or a typo or something in L4 that keeps throwing me every time I read it.

I didn't care for "queen of drama", I know you are trying to escape the cliche but for me, I am hearing the cliche anyway. Also, in the "How I envy . ." parts, I don't think you need "how" but you do need something for balance, tough to say what.

"illicit" feels a little alien to the rest of your voicing but that could just be me.

Thank you for an enjoyable read.

milo