04-06-2013, 02:20 AM
"but every angel craves to fly
so that love was made to die;"
This part of your poem is perhaps the climax of all conveyed emotions. It captures a particular scene without revealing too much or telling too little; it's right in-between total exposure and evasion.
Overall, your poem has done a good job reflecting what your intention. But it'd be even greater if you could compress your image. Rhyming was good too, by the way.
so that love was made to die;"
This part of your poem is perhaps the climax of all conveyed emotions. It captures a particular scene without revealing too much or telling too little; it's right in-between total exposure and evasion.
Overall, your poem has done a good job reflecting what your intention. But it'd be even greater if you could compress your image. Rhyming was good too, by the way.