After reading Lorca

[cantab]

The richness of your language is rather satisfying. 'Guttering cascade, pristine melancholy, turbulent fumes', have a pleasing intensity. Also, the progression of ideas in the poem is clear. 'Angelic wakefulness' is a bit sweet, and 'ardour of your verses' I find a bit melodramatic. But I think this is a good poem, that perhaps could be improved by toning down some of the descriptive language, which would allow the really strong parts to shine.