04-05-2013, 08:47 AM
Well -- I like the analogy of the chaotic relationship, not, it seems, brooking any advice from older wiser heads, and the simultaneous playing around with paints, acrylics, in any way which took the fancy, and calling it abstract, as opposed to practising (I suppose) drawing, water-colour and oil techniques until, being masters of the brushes and other paraphernalia, the pair were capable of producing workman-like pieces.
For some reason, 'so-called' seems inappropriate. Perhaps 'would-be' might be better.
As boring as it sounds to repeat, I think this would have benefitted a lot from words appealing to the five senses: after all, there must have been a palette lying around, with chrome yellow, cobalt, what have you, the pictures must have had colour; if they were teens, it would have been unusual for it to have been silent--and, for the matter of that, there might be every chance that the olfactory sense would be severely in play. And for sure, it would have been brought alive by the evocation of tactile things, smooth wooden brushes, de da de da
For some reason, 'so-called' seems inappropriate. Perhaps 'would-be' might be better.
As boring as it sounds to repeat, I think this would have benefitted a lot from words appealing to the five senses: after all, there must have been a palette lying around, with chrome yellow, cobalt, what have you, the pictures must have had colour; if they were teens, it would have been unusual for it to have been silent--and, for the matter of that, there might be every chance that the olfactory sense would be severely in play. And for sure, it would have been brought alive by the evocation of tactile things, smooth wooden brushes, de da de da