Cocoon

[Volaticus]

Nicely done. I really enjoy line 3 a lot more in the edit even though line 4 sounded like the one you didn't like.

Thanks a lot for your feedback

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The edit is definitely better than the original. I think L4 rounds it up nicely, much better than the original.

Two things pull at me though:

- Is there a reason for capitalising the colours? Actually, I like it now I've thought about it a bit more :-P It emphasises the season being colours.
- Do you mean spectrum instead of specter?

This poem makes me think of how it's meant to be spring - except it's cold and raining. :-(

Hi UnicornRainbowCake,
Firstly, thanks so much for commenting, I really appreciate it
As for your first question: I think you answered it yourself That was indeed my intention, by capitalising the colours.

And yes, I mean colour spectrum. I was unsure if I could use either "color spectre" or "color specter". After google'ing both, it seemed that "color specter" was a real phrase/expression. Am I mistaking?

And yeah, I know just what you mean. There's still snow here