The bride of Chenab (My first Triolet)

[UnicornRainbowCake]

I can see why you're so excited about it, it's very effective and poignant

I think it might read better as 'holding onto a hope barely alive' though.

Also, would her tears be long dried if she's still waiting for him there? It sound great but thinking back to it I'm not sure it quite makes as much sense. Perhaps 'lost her pride' instead? (Or something a bit less cliche...)

Thankyou for a wonderful piece though