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04-01-2013, 06:36 PM
Cheers for the crit man, I admit that the poem feels a little congested at times. When writing it, I justified the 'the's' in the second stanza because although I'm not referring to a specific train station, platform etc, I am discussing the many individuals who find themselves on any given one. Does that make sense? Anyway, everything else you said is pretty swell, I'll take this one back to the drawing board for a bit. Thanks.
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Porch Lights - by lewis taylor - 04-01-2013, 04:55 PM
RE: Porch Lights - by billy - 04-01-2013, 05:42 PM
RE: Porch Lights - by lewis taylor - 04-01-2013, 06:36 PM
RE: Porch Lights - by serge gurkski - 04-01-2013, 07:23 PM
RE: Porch Lights - by lewis taylor - 04-01-2013, 07:48 PM
RE: Porch Lights - by serge gurkski - 04-01-2013, 09:50 PM
RE: Porch Lights - by justcloudy - 04-02-2013, 02:31 AM
RE: Porch Lights - by lewis taylor - 04-02-2013, 08:42 AM
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