First Poem

[DaArthur]

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The pain I feel inside
I rush to hide
Because losing you
I can not do

Isn't the pain greater when you can't hide it?
Wouldn't the pain be greater with the loss?
Just my experience...

Sorry. My critique is short and sharp. Pain and loss are powerful emotions, but sometimes these expressions can be more powerful when taken to the Nth degree.
- Art