(03-31-2013, 08:18 PM)trueenigma Wrote: Hello fellow chess player! The poems now too bad..Hello,
They're more creativity exercise, less poem at this stage.
Okay Brandon, if you were to rewrite this one. I'd suggest not making me ask, is HE Clint Eastwood? Beyond that you may want to scramble the senses a bit. Have him hear smells and see tastes. I like the final loneliness idea as long as you ground it with concrete imagery.
I'll address your move of the knight with my move and poem.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson