But A Fantasy, Still

[Volaticus]

The way I meant it when I wrote it, was that their 'dancing, in unhinged grace', is 'a kind of addiction'/'fiction'.

"We're dancing in unhinged grace,
A kind of addiction. Or might it be fiction?

In that case this is better, as far as the grammar is concerned.

I believe you could still keep the hyphen after addiction, if you wanted to connect the two thoughts. Just a matter of changing a period into a comma.

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I hate to say it but the idea of suggesting the dancing is fictitious doesn't really make sense. "or is this fiction" would work but is a bit abstract, suggesting perhaps the while poem is fictitious, while "A kind of addiction- or is that fiction" would suggest that the addiction may be fictitious, which would make a little more sense.

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If you write a revision, well you post it? I'd be interested in seeing what you do with it in the next draft.

I'm a bit confused. I think I understand what you mean, but I'll need some time, to figure out how to make it better.
I've posted the first, small edit of the poem, and I'll post my next edit, when it's done