pint-sized prisoner

pint-sized prisoner

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03-31-2013, 05:17 PM

Thanks for a great read! The only critique I can offer is:
I found it a bit wordy and felt that some of the words could go.
The sentence in the second to last stanza needs a conjunction, or it could be divided into two separate sentences.

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pint-sized prisoner - by justcloudy - 03-29-2013, 08:55 AM

RE: pint-sized prisoner - by NakedBear - 03-29-2013, 01:11 PM

RE: pint-sized prisoner - by tmanzano - 03-29-2013, 01:39 PM

RE: pint-sized prisoner - by justcloudy - 03-29-2013, 08:41 PM

RE: pint-sized prisoner - by serge gurkski - 03-29-2013, 09:29 PM

RE: pint-sized prisoner - by justcloudy - 03-29-2013, 11:37 PM

RE: pint-sized prisoner - by serge gurkski - 03-30-2013, 01:42 AM

RE: pint-sized prisoner - by milo - 03-31-2013, 08:19 AM

RE: pint-sized prisoner - by trueenigma - 03-31-2013, 05:17 PM

RE: pint-sized prisoner - by justcloudy - 03-31-2013, 09:31 PM

RE: pint-sized prisoner - by milo - 04-02-2013, 06:54 AM

RE: pint-sized prisoner - by catdog - 04-02-2013, 05:51 PM

RE: pint-sized prisoner - by justcloudy - 04-02-2013, 09:04 PM

RE: pint-sized prisoner - by philoinlove - 04-03-2013, 11:59 AM

RE: pint-sized prisoner - by justcloudy - 04-04-2013, 07:33 AM

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