Untitled haiku
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(03-31-2013, 10:02 AM)Volaticus Wrote:  This is my first attempt, so please bear with me :p


Decrepit woman,
Lifting sacks of the ample,
Cold is her splendor.
generally avoid any modification if you can. These depends on absolute perfect word choice so if you can distill, you do.

crone
lifts sacks
cold splendor

not a bad attempt though

milo
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Untitled haiku - by Volaticus - 03-31-2013, 10:02 AM
RE: Untitled - by milo - 03-31-2013, 10:06 AM
RE: Untitled - by milo - 03-31-2013, 10:18 AM
RE: Untitled - by billy - 03-31-2013, 10:09 AM
RE: Untitled - by Volaticus - 03-31-2013, 10:18 AM
RE: Untitled - by milo - 03-31-2013, 11:30 AM
RE: Untitled haiku - by Volaticus - 03-31-2013, 11:35 AM



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