Relationships

[NakedBear]

Harvesting
the spoiled fruits
of love left
unexpressed.
Unexpressed love I appreciate, but I have two problems with this stanza. First, 'spoiled fruit' lacks freshness. Second, two whole stanzas below connect with the sea, and maybe a third could with a bit of tweeking. So, where does fruit come into this picture? It seems an outlier. You could cut it or rework it.

Marvelling
at buoyant youth This connects with the water theme below. Maybe nightime can also be drawn in a way connecting it with the sea? So this stanza and the next pair build together.
and nighttime
at its best.

Harbouring
relationships
upon the ocean
floor.Like this stanza, probably because 'harbouring' is an old metaphor and has almost lost its first meaning, yet here it is poignantly revived in my mind with 'upon the ocean / floor'

Beneath the frothing,
rolling waves
that pound my broken
core. Core doesn't work for me. It seems to abstract a concept, and doesn't evoke thoughts of water, ocean, boats or much of anything connected with what came before. Actually, I thought of an apple the first time I read it, which is likely not your intent.

Love laboured over and lost is a theme I don't get tired of, and I think this is a nice expression.

Mikey.[/b]