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The beautiful lies
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03-26-2013, 11:47 AM
I found this piece very beautiful. There was wonderful rhythm and i loved the alliterations and internal rhyming. However, I think I would have enjoyed this piece more if it took a different perspective. Rather than using "you" and "I", I think an objective tone would have been more fitting to the essence of your piece--loneliness. But overall, I enjoyed it a great deal
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The beautiful lies - by neena2504 - 03-21-2013, 07:38 PM
RE: The beautiful lies - by rowens - 03-21-2013, 10:31 PM
RE: The beautiful lies - by neena2504 - 03-21-2013, 10:36 PM
RE: The beautiful lies - by rowens - 03-21-2013, 10:49 PM
RE: The beautiful lies - by saeity - 03-21-2013, 11:47 PM
RE: The beautiful lies - by neena2504 - 03-21-2013, 11:54 PM
RE: The beautiful lies - by saeity - 03-22-2013, 12:04 AM
RE: The beautiful lies - by milo - 03-24-2013, 08:56 PM
RE: The beautiful lies - by neena2504 - 03-25-2013, 04:26 PM
RE: The beautiful lies - by milo - 03-26-2013, 07:14 AM
RE: The beautiful lies - by rowens - 03-24-2013, 11:50 PM
RE: The beautiful lies - by NovaKaine - 03-26-2013, 04:56 AM
RE: The beautiful lies - by neena2504 - 03-28-2013, 12:17 AM
RE: The beautiful lies - by milo - 03-28-2013, 05:46 PM
RE: The beautiful lies - by billy - 03-26-2013, 08:09 AM
RE: The beautiful lies - by allykat727 - 03-26-2013, 11:47 AM
RE: The beautiful lies - 1st Edit - by neena2504 - 03-28-2013, 06:45 PM
RE: The beautiful lies - 1st Edit - by milo - 03-29-2013, 06:06 AM
RE: The beautiful lies - 1st Edit - by billy - 03-29-2013, 10:04 AM
RE: The beautiful lies - 1st Edit - by neena2504 - 04-01-2013, 02:56 AM
RE: The beautiful lies - 1st Edit - by milo - 04-01-2013, 03:12 AM
RE: The beautiful lies - 1st Edit - by neena2504 - 04-01-2013, 05:49 AM
RE: The beautiful lies - by tmanzano - 03-29-2013, 01:16 PM
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