Are You Not Great?

[milo]

I don’t really care if you think I’m not great.
I’m at least enough to win all your hate.
You’re spewing out words on deaf ears my friend.
Did you think I was someone you could offend?

I have your attention, positive or not.
I do not think this is the ending you sought.
It appears that you care, more often than not,
that I am not someone who hangs on your thought

Sticks and stones often break my bones.
I don’t intend on a cliche.
But my steel sword of a heart is honed.
I find myself empowered not grave.

So am I really not great?
Or do you just disagree,
dislike the views that you see?
Who knows? You could be a friend to be.
Because this hate does not get to me.

Remember these words.
It’s what you deserve.
Keep my advice in your mind.

Don’t care about hate.
It justs makes you great,
when you let it all be fine.


Revision
I don’t care if I’m not that great.
I’m at least enough to earn hate.
You’re speaking to deaf ears, my friend.
I’m not someone you can offend?

I’ve been heard, positive or not.
This is not the ending you sought.
And you care, more often than not,
That I don’t hang on the weak thoughts

Sticks and stones have broken my bones.
And so have overused cliches
My sword of a heart has been honed.
I find I'm not angry but gay.

Remember these words.
It’s what you deserve.
Keep my advice in your mind.

Don’t care about hate.
It just makes you great,
when you let it all be fine.

Yes, this is better, but you are still so caught up in what you /want/ to say.

try:

I don’t care I’m not great.
I am all that you hate.
You are spewing out deaf my friend.
Did you think I was someone that you could offend?

Your attention
I don't think
the ending appears
that I am not someone who hangs
like a picture
you mention
with all of your peers
and I am not someone who hangs.
stones break
bones intend
my steel sword is honed.
and I find my grave
so I am. So I am. So I am
the views that you see?
You could be a friend.
Remember
you deserve
my advice.

I don't care. I don't care. I don't.
Care- it just makes you
nice.

milo