As the Clock Ticks

[softlyfalling]

I feel like this theme might better be expressed in a tighter but yet more abstract way...fewer words creating images that are analogous, not quite so concrete. Time is so abstract that one wonders if it exists at all. I think not, but this is my own personal philosophy.
That being said, a poem that is meant to be serious and intellectual might omit the words "one two" at the beginning...my inner child stood up at the front of the class and started right in with "One, two, buckle my shoe"