Gone
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(03-22-2013, 08:26 AM)saeity Wrote:  
He devours in one
bite, thoughtfully chews upon.
Throws up and spits out!
Hi Saeity, I like this, the message. I love haiku/senryu and all the form controversy that comes with it. I prefer minimal wording. I might pare this to:
devoured
chewed up
spit out
a thought to be binned at will. Again, let me say how much I enjoyed this.
Heart
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Gone - by saeity - 03-22-2013, 08:26 AM
RE: Gone - by Heartafire - 03-23-2013, 12:41 AM
RE: Gone - by softlyfalling - 03-23-2013, 04:05 AM
RE: Gone - by Soaring Eagle - 03-29-2013, 02:26 AM



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