Nothing at the center

[NakedBear]

Brilliant concept for a poem, Mikey.

For the sake of rhythm, would you consider "swear another oath" instead of "swear a new oath"?

How important is it to end on a strong beat? On the one hand I don't want to rob 'oath' of any punch, yet I still like 'new' here. 'New': Not just another oath that might fail, although it may, but a fresh oath, not stale and hollow like the ones before.

Hmmm... I'll think it over. Thanks.

Also, maybe dashes around -- sometimes -- as an aside rather than commas.

But such little things, because I really like this idea and the way you've delivered it.

I'm pleased you like it. I still worry about offending sensibilities with what I write.

Mikey.