Dandelion Woman

[milo]

Cheers milo... I actually thought I had "lawns", damn those typos. Now, about that but ... it should convey the difference between a neat row of pansies and those dreaded weeds that just won't stay where they're supposed to (ie somewhere else). Any suggestions?

Amy, thank you -- and yes, I always relate best to things that aren't constrained by someone else's notion of what ought to be.

The problem occurs with but because your reader /knows/ you are talking dandelions from the start (titles and all) and those lions are most famous for their seeds, perhaps /more/ famous than pansies.

If you want to keep the contrast you are going to have to force a couple intro lines, perhaps extolling the virtuous propriety of those well-mannered pansies.

Unfortunately, re-reading a couple more times has brought your confused "it" (s1l3) to my mind. If "it" is the seeds, it should be plural, if "it" is our lady of lions, well, hell, she was a she not that long ago, what happened to addressing her more politely?

ahhh . . . well.

milo