Enlightenment's Release

[softlyfalling]

I think it's good to have a rhyme there. But "Your heart’s philosophy to understand" kind of feels like a filler line.

The rest of the poem sounds good. And I figure you know what you're doing, and can work out something there that feels more natural like the rest of it.

I threw the baby out with the bathwater, thought about what I am really trying to express here, and wrote a whole new line...what do you think?