03-21-2013, 10:42 PM
I think it's good to have a rhyme there. But "Your heart’s philosophy to understand" kind of feels like a filler line.
The rest of the poem sounds good. And I figure you know what you're doing, and can work out something there that feels more natural like the rest of it.
The rest of the poem sounds good. And I figure you know what you're doing, and can work out something there that feels more natural like the rest of it.