03-21-2013, 06:44 PM
Hi Medusa,
Loved your poem, it is beautiful. I am a novice in this but may I suggest something?
Could you replace the 'make contact' in the penultimate line with something like 'connect', 'touch' or 'meet'? That part is breaking the smooth flow of your poem.
Cheers
Loved your poem, it is beautiful. I am a novice in this but may I suggest something?
Could you replace the 'make contact' in the penultimate line with something like 'connect', 'touch' or 'meet'? That part is breaking the smooth flow of your poem.
Cheers
~Neena